(Formerly Valla K'Sardis, working on a new name)

I didn't know that at all. I thought it was cool it's just the instant tech absorption was a bit much and I have a habit of toning down powers to not feel too OP. I'm trying to match her up a bit more with her TFRP version(who I'm giving a royal guard equivalent to too) Though maybe instead of retconning the shield and beam entirely it's just a new setting she acquired that she prefers.

Perfectly feasible for the arm based on the original concept.

-Energy absorber: Also known as the guard module, is able to absorb energy(whether kinetic or otherwise) by blocking with the arm, which charges up her beam weapon to release it on her enemy. This has boundaries and it takes perfect timing to pull off, with the wrong timing leading to either a miss(which will just make things worse than simply blocking it with a shield or dodging) or absorbing a low amount of energy. Its limit in terms of energy absorption is about a super missile level, and something like a human punch doesn't give her enough energy to really do anything useful(though it is an effective method of blocking)

I dropped the whole reinforced skeleton concept, but I'm keeping the other cybernetics. I think it's a bit silly the more I think about it, especially since her bone damage can be fixed in the same timeframe by just holding her unconscious and letting her regeneration work for a month, and her regeneration would make giving her a full body aug like that an absolute bitch. She is also an Elven alien, I should write a list of different species the planet has because it's no longer human-centric. At least one of them will be something Orcish, though I'm gonna try to do more than just make them fantasy races.
There are still (mutated) humans, with Arcturus still being one of them.

Hawke is now a psionic, and her backstory was updated with stories I wrote.

I'm considering dropping the prosthetic arm(with it being explained as her body rejecting the arm, and her arm attempting to grow back which ends up fully happening when she has her healing factor artificially sped up, which also causes her scarring to disappear) and definitely adding a weakness where her prosthetic eyes aren't exactly perfect, enhancing her perception of light but also being incredibly sensitive to it as a drawback.


Edit: She'd also get them replaced with better ones, but keep wearing sunglasses either to not have her prosthetics(which look human with techy bits on them which could unsettle some people) be visible, make it hard for people to see what she's looking at, or just because she thinks they look cool.

I dropped the idea of her wearing sunglasses after the Tawfret story due to light sensitivity, just because it seems pointless and I already got Locke for "cyborg who always wears sunglasses" plus I'd have to retcon more than I want to.

Also I'm working on rewording the arm abilities as if they're abilities of a suit, including the plasma cannon causes the arm firing it to protrude out to make a cannon(kinda like how the arm cannon widens when different beams are used)

So time manipulation(since I gave it to her on the Total Fantasy site): Good idea or ridiculously overpowered?
It'd just be slowing and stopping it, I feel like the explanation would be an experimental device that gets installed in her suit.
My reasoning for thinking it'd be okay is that Castlevania protagonists can stop time and nobody questions it.

Here though, I think it could and probably would be too OP. I advise against it.

Yeah I can't really think of a way she'd get a time device(that wouldn't cause the entire fucking galaxy to go after her to claim it for themselves) now that I actually thought about it.
TFRP and Metroid Hawke are different enough that I shouldn't try to equalize them anyway.

Yeaahh, those too.

I brought back the concept of her internal organs being enhanced cybernetics, and made her extremely pale, mostly to put her closer to the TFRP version without going too far with it.


Edit: Though I'm not bringing back the reinforced skeleton idea, I think it was a bit too out there and she could just as easily have a stronger skeleton(that can regenerate) due to her mutated physiology.

I think design-wise, Talon's zero suit will resemble(and be named after) the skull suit from Metal Gear Solid 2, except black instead of blue. I think having the suit have a somewhat skeletal look/name would be a nice reference to her being a lich on TFRP.

It'd also boost her psionic powers in addition to storing her armor, with it being developed with a mix of Tawfretian and ancient elven technology found on Tawfret.


Edit: I'm keeping this design concept even though she's not a lich on TFRP anymore

I might give the mech suit concept(or at least bulky power armor) to Hawke instead of Locke. She already has a smaller suit, but maybe this could have some form of advantage, like being easier to repair, find parts for, generally making her larger and more capable of fighting bigger opponents.

Plus bulky power armor suits are cool as shit to me. An idea would be it being something she airdrops in when she needs it. It'd be a prototype suit created by the Tawfretian Alliance using reverse engineered Chozo technology, the main reason it'd be that bulky is that they're unable to miniaturize it just yet. The design would look vaguely similar(since it's based on Chozo designs) to Samus's Varia suit, though black with a purple visor, and with retractable weapons. I'd take the whole embedded weapons idea away from Locke if I go through with this. The appearance style was based on this piece of artwork I found that I think looks really cool

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edit: Also I redid her backstory a little because I completely forgot to redo her backstory after de-elfing her.

Alright I decided on it, she'll have 3 "weight classes" of armor. Her skull suit, which would be far more mobile and give more freedom to use her powers, her power suit, which is like a middle ground, or the mech suit, which would lean more towards brute force and heavy weaponry. The mech suit would have to be dropped in rather than switched to on the fly like the powersuit could be, though.


The skullsuit also has a helmet that automatically appears when it detects a lack of oxygen in the area, resembling a gas mask helmet.

I don't know if this would be too much of a problem but what if Hawke's psionics are just magic she got passed down from elves in her bloodline? Maybe having more than one magic character would be a bad move but since magic exists in this universe I'm thinking about it.

Still undecided on the magic thing, but I dropped the augs. Even the reflex booster, since I figured it was something that could easily be done with psionics.

I added an arm cannon for her, that retracts into her suit when not needed. I feel like it'd be a good way to differentiate her in the suit from her outside of it.

I think I might bring back the concept of Phazers that I talked about, with them mainly being a Tawfret thing due to how long they've been exposed to Phazon. Talon would be one whose ability is copying other Phazer abilities, along with psychic abilities. The Alliance would call them Psykers until it's fully understood by them what Phazon is, due to them also always having psychic abilities.

They'd become more of a thing in the universe during the Legacy era when peoples previous exposure to Phazon actually effects reproduction.

I finally have a general idea of what Talon's powersuit should look like, based on the design from Matterfall. Though with the two visors combined, probably.



In addition I think I'm gonna upgrade her to using primarily energy weapons, bullet-shootin' weapons will primarily be Locke's thing.

Idea I had: The equivalent to the Hawke family in TFRP would be Project Hawke. The rogue Federation scientist Jonathan Hawke genetically engineers/creates waves of people over the years, genetically modifying them and exposing them to depleted Phazon(Phazon that's been far away from any connection to the Leviathan for years, something that only exists on Tawfret because of the strange way it impacted) which gives them random abilities when they grow up. Their aging is accelerated until they're 10, and they're released in random areas, with Talon having been picked up by the town she starts off in.

Jonathan Hawke is assassinated by the RAIT sometime before Talon joins the Sons of Tawfret, but his research data is taken and given to Federation scientists. Though he's also wandering the wasteland, horribly mutated and insane due to injecting himself with straight Phazon while he was dying.

Updated her powers with the "power copying" concept. I'll update the history later.
Also added the berserker rage concept, shown in one of my sorta outdated stories where she fights Leon, and a description of her personality in general now that I figured her out.

So I made up a race on Tawfret. Sort of half-reptilian, half-elfish.

Total overhaul.

Name changed, decided this should be a new character. Will be rebooting the original Talon Hawke with a different(Though not this different) style soon.